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Changing Scenery

The Breeze of Spring is voluptuous.
The cool nights echo with the songs of singing chirpers.
The quiet Winter is behind us now.
The trees are awakening;
The Sun is beginning to bloom,
Playing hide-away within the Clouds.
The newly flowers, shiver in the slightly chilling day.
The melody of the Wind is long and flows endlessly as Rain sings down.

…the singing has stopped.
The flowers and trees, full of bug-life moments ago,
Are now sighing in the heat of a too close Star.
The Wind's flute has turned into an Ocean band,
While the Sun no longer plays peek-a-boo in the Sky,
For the seasons have changed,
And it is Summer now…

Unbearable heat soon turns to slight cold.
The birds pack up and move onward—toward vacation homes.
Animals—rabbits, bears and squirrels—eat and store;
While the Maples, Oaks and Birches make up their beds,
Shedding their colors onto sidewalks and roads.
Autumn has painted reds, yellows, and browns on everything in this moment…

Cold soon sets in,
The chill bitingly bitter.
Whites, grays, and blues cover all,
As the world sleeps under an ivory blanket.  
We are back to a crystallized beginning.
Ok, this is a poem I wrote for the group, :iconlivelaughwrite:'s contest.

The theme is Time, words must be under 200(this is about 199--cutting it close, I know), and all entries must be in by May 6th

This is my secound try at writing something for this contest and I've changed this poem a bit--removed some words and put in a new stanza to replace the ones I took out

so be gentle and tell me what you think! :D

The prose, Many A Star was the 1st one I wrote for the contest, read it and tell me what you think :)

To :reading: more of my poems click here please
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angussporran Sep 6, 2011  Student Writer
I love the kind of childish tone you've used here. 'the songs of singing chirpers' What a wonderful wee phrase! :P

The transition across the year is seamless and you hardly feel the 'time' pass...just like in real life I find! :laughing:
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Yuki-chan112093 Sep 6, 2011  Student Writer
:giggle: thank you!
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:iconangussporran:
angussporran Sep 6, 2011  Student Writer
Oh, I didn't realise this was another one by you! :P Well you're welcome AGAIN I spose! :D
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Yuki-chan112093 Sep 6, 2011  Student Writer
XD
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:iconvicky271:
how did your deviantart to look this? you know with both a picture and document...
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Yuki-chan112093 May 4, 2011  Student Writer
when you submit something, writing mostly for me, there's like a....preview spot, but it's only after you load something into the 'add text/upload file' spot....does this help? was i confusing in anyway?
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:iconvicky271:
no, i'm going to try it
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Yuki-chan112093 May 4, 2011  Student Writer
ok :)
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SoupyAssassin Apr 15, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I really like the changes! Very good!
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Yuki-chan112093 Apr 16, 2011  Student Writer
thanks :) so should i enter it?
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